BANG.
The bus had been shattered. Destroyed. Obliterated.
They had never witnessed anything like this before.
Deafening cries and shrieks were heard from nearby.
The news slowly started to filter through to loved ones.
"Don't get upset son" said the father, "You have plenty more toys you can play with".
I love the play on the idea of 'loved ones' - good misleading of the reader for effect. Close punctuation before you close speech marks.
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